Monday, March 11, 2013
THE WAY I SEE IT!
Memoir... leave them wanting more-more-more.
Personalize your story so that the reader sees what you saw, hears what you heard and feels what you felt. Remember to use lots of sensory detail. Here's an example of SHOW don’t TELL.
TELLING: Dad and I used to walk a parking lot each Saturday morning in search of coins. The neighboring factory workers partied there after work Friday nights and often lost loose change in the gravel.
SHOWING: The year I was ten, I would quietly slip out of bed and into my clothes and join Dad at the crack of dawn on Saturday mornings in early fall. We walked the neighboring factory’s block-long, gravel parking lot in search of coins. Employees partied there on Friday nights after the neighborhood corner bar closed.
Our exhaled breath made puffy clouds, our feet kicked up gravel dust, and we kept our eyes to the ground searching for silver. Pennies were easy to find, but I could spy a nickel in that gray gravel from far away. The time I found two half dollars, Dad and I both whooped and hollered as he rubbed them together like a magician. He bought a half pound of sliced bologna with red rind and a fresh loaf of white bread. He gave me a dime. I took my time selecting penny candy. Went home with a bagful to share with my brother.
There was a time in my early writing when I did not feel comfortable revealing personal details about my life, because I feared having my life not my writing judged. When you let go of that fear, your writing will flourish